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Jenny couldn’t believe what was going on. If she didn’t do something Sandy would kill her father, or her father would kill him! She was going to run to her father when she was grabbed from behind and a sword was placed across her throat. She wanted to scream, but it would be no use. The rabbit who had the sword to her throat then whispered in her ear. “If you move, or scream, then I will kill you!”
She recognized the voice and knew who this rabbit was. It was Daggler! But why did Daggler have a sword pointed at her throat? Her father worked for Daggler, was there something she didn’t know?
Her eyes then landed on Sandy. He was fighting her father still, but there was more. There was a tall rabbit who hid behind a tree with a knife in his hand. She wonder what the rabbit was doing over there? Her eyes rested on Sandy again. Sandy didn’t look good, he had small wounds everywhere. She looked at her father, the same went for him. They both looked tired and weak.
She took her eyes off them and looked around for her brothers. She hoped they were still at their aunt’s. She looked back at her father and Sandy. She couldn’t believe what she saw!
Her father was on the ground, Sandy hovering over him, his claymore pointed at her father’s throat. But there was more. The rabbit behind the tree was standing and ready to throw the knife at Sandy’s back! She screamed as she tried to escape form Daggler’s grasp. She hit Daggler hard in the stomach. He let go of her and ran towards Sandy. She saw the rabbit throw the knife and with one desperate lung she placed herself in front of Sandy’s exposed back. She then fell to the ground, the knife sticking in her chest.
By M. G. P.
Btw to everyone who asked and was praying, we did get to go to our family birthday celebration thing!
wha..... ok... WHY? Jenny noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
like @Jo4life said, i'm getting a time machine too!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY DON'T DO THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOW I GOTTA FIND THE NEXT CHAPTER..............................
Great writing, tho! You guys've got me hooked!
OHHHH NOOOOOOOOOOOOO
#Jenny4life JENNY MUST SURVIVE!!!!!!!
But what about Jo?
I’m honestly laughing so hard right now! I can’t believe 4life became a thing! 🤷♀️ but one last peaceful protest
#jenny #jenny4life!!!! NO MORE DEATH NO MORE TRICKS!!!!! PEACE AND PROSPERITY!!!
Yes! We shall prevail!! #JointheJennypact #Jenny4life #jennywillsurvive
@The Fowlers It's four against one! Majority rules! #JointheJennyPact #Jenny4Life
#Jenny4life #jointheJennypact
#Jenny4Life
#Jenny4Life
#Jenny4life
Yes!!! Jenny will not die on our watch, she will survive! It is what it is but it is not what it shall be! #Jenny4life
Who wants to make a pact to keep Jenny alive? #Jennywillsurvive #timemachine
Nooooooooo! Not Jenny!!! The best characters are always the first to go, why do you do this to us?!?! *Loudly weeps on the bed and screams for Jenny to live* This is sooooo well written and very emotional, you can tell by everyone going 'No not Jenny!'. Just don't emotionally scar us too bad😉.
Time to start looking for my TIME MACHIN!!! *hysterical laughing*
😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😒😭😭😭😭😭😭😒😒😒😒😒😒😭😭😭😭😭😒😒😒😒😒😭😭😭😫😫😫😫 NOOOOOOOOOO. EDIT IT!!!! Ughhhhhhhh Jenny was only in two chapters, you CAN’T DO THIS!!!! Great job btw the way. As for feedback, JENNY getting stabbed. I don’t care if she lives, she will still be hurt emotionally!! Please keep her alive though. PLEASEEEEEEEEEEE. WHAT DO WE HAVE TO DOOOOOO?!!
You will not get away with this M.G.P.! Jenny can't die! Also, amazingly written! I won't let this happen! It is what it is but it is not what it shall be!
I wasn’t untill you told me not to smile, NOW IM SMILING!!!!
*eyes wide with horror, shrieking building in lungs* NOO!!!! (So so good!! 😭)
It’s ME and all you guys
I do have one thing that I think you should fix, or that I didn’t like...
YOU KILLING JENNY!!!!!
(I’m growing despret here guys)
Bless us and splash us, precious! (As Gollum would say...) Really, this is so captivating. Jenny's so brave and selfless. This is the time for True Blue. lol (Btw, so glad you got to go to the birthday celebration! And I wanted to ask - so, when you ask for feedback, do you mean about the writing, plot, both, or something other than that? Just wanted to know so I can know what to look out for in the future...)
*imideatly stops throwing things around in search for time machine* oh, ok.
JENNY4life!!!!
I- I- NO! No. IM NOT LATE!!! I can time travle! I just have to figure out how to get into the story!!!! I WILL SAVE HER!!!
*defiently throws fist in the air*
BUT IT IS NOT WHAT IT SHALL BE!!!
I will take her place!!! Just ney Jenny!
NO!!!!!!!!! NO!!! NO! NO No nononononononononononono. *falls on the floor and sobs* nononononononono NO NO!!!
You can’t do this!!!! No. NO. I SAID NO!!!
(absolutely love your writing, the wording is beutiful and I love how Jenny is portrayed to be confused. Great job! Can’t wait for next chapter!)
*continues to cry*