Hey guys! Not sure how I quite feel about this chapter, but oh well...lol...hope you guys enjoy!!! Feedback welcome!!!
Rissy
Later that night when Sarah and Maraly were sound asleep Ella laid on the floor, propped up on her left arm not able to sleep. She gazed out of a small window above the desk. The bright moonlight shone through the window causing eerie shadows to cast on the bedroom walls in a way that seemed like they were dancing. The moonlight shone so brightly that Ella could see little shiny, golden stars twinkling in the bright night.
Ella stared out the window for a time, her mind still on how the buck had no family. She couldn't help but feel bad for the buck. She didn't know why she felt this way because she didn't even know the buck or his family. Perhaps it was because if she lost her family she would probably feel the same way he did, miserable. But that didn't even seem to be the right word about how the buck felt. Ella wanted to help him so much. But how was a fourteen-year-old doe like her to do something to help him? She really wanted to help, but there was probably nothing she could do. She was weak and afraid, afraid of letting someone down like helping them then after the help leaving. That was one of her worst fears, not being nice or letting someone down, leaving a loved one behind she had several fears and they all haunted her.
Ella took her eyes away from the window and thought that it would probably be a pretty smart idea if she tried to get some rest. She laid her head down on the pillow and after a while of turning and tossing, she finally fell asleep. It wasn't a deep sleep but at least it was something to get her through the night.
Ella slept for a few hours until she got overheated and started turning and tossing and rolling in her sleep. Her body was drenched in sweat and her breathing was weak and shallow. She tried to force herself to wake up but couldn't. It was like she was in a coma or a different world. She could hear the awful sounds of screams followed by the heat and burning smell of smoke.
Ella felt someone roughly grab her by the arms and shake her and yell in her ear, "Wake up! We need to get out of here, fire! Ella, please!"
It was Sarah's voice that much Ellen knew but she couldn't, no matter how hard she tried to wake herself up. She guessed some of it was from being overheated and the other half was from her breathing problem. Her breathing became ever so shallow and it felt like her lungs were slowly collapsing.
Ella tried harder to open her eyes as she heard more yells from Sarah. "Oh Maker, please! Please, make her wake up! Help me, please!"
Ella finally managed to open her eyes to see a look of horror on Sarah's face. Sarah breathed a sigh. "Thank goodness, we need to get out of here before the house collapses."
Ella looked around the room that was on fire, large flames consuming the walls. Her eyes widened. The smell of smoke overtook her and burned her lungs and eyes. She coughed as her breathing started to become more shallow.
Maraly was over by the window hitting it hard with her arm trying to break the glass free. Ella watched as Maraly banged hard against the glass and it started to crack and ripped through Marilyn's flesh, causing blood to drip from her arm. Maraly cried out in pain as she hit the window one last time. The window shattered into a million pieces flying all over the place. Maraly collapsed holding her arm tight as flames of fire scuttled around her.
Ella heard a loud cracking noise and she looked up to see a beam on the ceiling catch fire, breaking free, swinging downward, right toward Maraly's head.
"Maraly!" Ella and Sarah screamed.
NO! I'm pretty sure this isn't a dream. The wolves are burning all the houses.
I wanna scream. You and your cliffhangers, Rissy, they are cause for concern lol
EEEEEK! Cliffhanger cliffhanger! No, Maraly please be okay! I could totally understand Ella's perspective on wanting to help and not let others down... you did such an amazing job conveying that!!! Awesome job Rissy!
Aaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!! I need to know what happens next!!!!! Wow, she thought she was in a bad dream but it was actually real life. I love how you used really strong verbs in here, like rip, scuttle, bang, shattered - they make the writing really come alive and give it an energy that is perfect for that action! This is one of the most epic cliffhangers... like the beam is literally FALLING down toward her head right now!!!!!!!!!! I can't wait for more!!!!!