I'm sorry if there are any errors. I haven't read the books in a while and can't right now... Here's chapter two! Any feedback is more than welcome! This one's short, but better than chapter one.
Also, should I do more dialogue, like last time or not much, like this time?
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Into the Hollow
Chapter 2
By Jo Longtreader
2 years after events of the previous chapter
“I’m going to play my game outside,” A four-year-old Heather O’Nick said.
“Little Picket wants to come,” her mother said, holding a two-year-old Picket’s hand.
“Is he old enough?” Heather asked.
“I’m old enough!” Picket said.
“Okay, come on, I’ll show you how to play,” Heather said. The two kits walked outside of the elm tree and into the yard. Heather picked up a six-pointed star, made of three sticks and a red ribbon.
"I'll throw the star and we both try to get it, whoever gets it first wins, " Heather explained.
“Okay,” Picket said. The young buck got on all four legs, ready to run after the start when his sister threw it. Heather pulled the star back and flung it forward with all her might. The two young rabbits took after the star that was now in the fields behind the big elm that was now their home. Picket had located the star and was running quickly toward it, even at a young age, Picket was great at quick calculations. He darted towards the star and grabbed it. He held it up in victory, excited that he had won the first time he played. Heather walked up to him,
"Good job, " she said. Picket looked at the house, "I wonder what Mommy and Daddy are doing, " Picket said curiously.
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Whittle Longtreader, now called Whittle O'Nick, sat down in a chair near him. He picked up a book and started to read. The book, titled, The Rise and Fall of King Jupiter the Great, told the tale of the conflict with the evil warlord, Morbin Blackhawk. He sighed at the part when General (? not sure what Garten was) Garten Longtreader, his brother, betrayed King Jupiter and showed the world about how he was loyal to Morbin. He set the book down as there was a knock on the door. Whittle opened it.
"Hello, brother," Garten said from the doorway.
i am reading this it's really great!
Whittle! do something to Garten!