Okay guys, didn't have time to post this earlier and now were just posting this...sorry really would like to stay and talk but we can't.... so I’ve never written a fan-fic before, so here goes nothing and everything…lol…
He stood there looking at the hand extended out in front of him, ready for him to shake it. He thought about it, he didn’t know if he could do it? Could he, should he, would he? He knew if he went, he would be free, but even though he could be free should he leave his father? Sure, his father was cruel, but he was still his father. But could he do it, could he really leave, would he leave? He then lifted his hand and reached out to shake it, but then he stopped.
“Well,” the rabbit in front of him said.
“I…I…I need to think about it,” he said as he put his hand down.
The rabbit did the same and looked at him, a sad look on his dark furred face. “Two days, we meet here is two days. Think about it, but we are not waiting any longer than that.”
He nodded. “Thank you, David. I’ll think on it,” he said smiling weakly at his dark furred friend.
David smiled back then sighed. “Why don’t you just leave him Alan and come with us?” David said, his amber eyes filled with confusion.
“I don’t know David, I just don’t know.”
David nodded then turned around and started to walk away, but he stopped and said over his shoulder, “I hope to see you in two days Alan.” Then he disappeared into the night.
“Me too, David, me too.” Alan sighed and started to walk home. The night was dark and cold, winter was coming soon and it was getting colder every day. The moon was full and bright tonight and thousands of pale-yellow stars filled the night sky, but Alan didn’t care about those kind of things right now. All he wanted was to get home before his father. Soon the small farm was in sight, he walked quickly to the house and opened the door. He stepped inside but then his blood froze his father was standing there, a small bottle of something strong in his hand. His eyes flashed as he hit Alan in the face so suddenly that Alan fell to the floor. Alan touched his lip in shock, he was bleeding. His father had really hit him!
His father looked at him then said, almost spitting the words out, “You’re late Alan, you’re late.”
Hope you guys liked it, any feedback would be great!
J.G.P.
P.S. @Jo4life life could you please banana Rissy, she thinks she’s not good at anything and won’t listen to me and K.A.P. because she says were her sisters and we have to say that she is good at stuff...whatever that means….so could you please banana the girl!
Hey, Rissy, I LOVE what you wrote! (Not sure what bananna-ing someone is, but you are great at writing, and drawing.) I often feel like I can't contribute anything to the world, and when I feel that way, I remember that I am made the way God wanted me, and being "good" is defined differently in everybody's minds. Just be content with yourself, and give everything you have - be the best you can be - and love people! That is what matters - love. No matter what you're good at, you can always be good at loving.
You did great! @Kaleb great words! Everyone is a write, and everyone has a story.
Great chapter. I really enjoyed all the details you put in it. And Rissy, YOU CANNOT BE NEGATIVE! YOU ARE SPECIAL, TALENTED, GOOD AT MORE STUFF THAN AN ORDINARY PERSON, AND EVERYTHING EVERYBODY ELSE HAS SAID ON THIS THREAD. JUST BECAUSE ONE PERSON TOLD YOU DIFFERENTLY DOESN’T MEAN IT’S TRUE! NEVER GIVE UP! FIGHT BACK! YOU WILL HAVE VICTORY. JUST TRUST THE Lord! LISTEN TO US! PLEASE! #KEEPFIGHTINGTHEGOODFIGHT I KNOW IT’S HARD SOMETIMES. YOU WANT TO GIVE UP WITH EVERYTHING WITH IN YOU! I KNOW! BUT PLEASE DON’T DO IT!YOU WILL FEEL BETTER AFTER YOU FOUGHT A HARD BATTLE, AND THEN YOU CAN LOOK BACK AND SAY, satan, I HAVE VICTORY OVER YOU AND YOU ARE UNDER MY FEET. SAME THING FOR [@Jo4life] and @Mr. Blackstar!
And Rissy... how can you think that?!!! You are so good at what you do - at writing, drawing, at everything you've shown on being on this site, I mean... no one can replace you. You are so talented. You are an awesome person! You gotta believe it yourself, not just hear it from us! Cause the whole world could say it, but you still just dismiss it as us being nice.
I want to cry that is so sad! I can tell this is the beginning of a great fanfic... and the description of the night sky and moon was beautiful. Wonderful job!!!!
REALLY GOOD!!! NICE JOB, J.G.P.! Also, RISSY!!! LISTEN TO ME!!! YOU ARE AMAZING!! YOU'RE ART, WRITING, AND EVERYTHING ELSE IS AWESOME!!!! DON'T BE NEGATIVE LIKE ME!!!
What!!!!! nononononononononononono. No! No being negative!!! Rissy, you are amazing! And talented and a great friend! You havd done nothing but being kind and I didn’t just name a character after you because it was your birthday! It’s because your such a special person! Listen to your sisters!!!! You are SPECTACULAR and you should know that. Have some bannana s. 🍌🍌🍌🍌🍌
Great job! I am currently writing a fan fic on Picket and Weezie(I wish it was Emma:( I will publish the first chapter soon!